tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post6422791654861506873..comments2023-10-31T11:53:56.276-04:00Comments on The 828: I need some help with writing...Paige Woinerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07204238243107594354noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-91237125148189165772011-06-24T11:53:12.470-04:002011-06-24T11:53:12.470-04:00Thanks, Paige! I'll try not to take TOO long g...Thanks, Paige! I'll try not to take TOO long getting back to you, LOL. ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-74004861315263594822011-06-23T19:39:56.345-04:002011-06-23T19:39:56.345-04:00Besides some dialogue at the beginning that doesn&...Besides some dialogue at the beginning that doesn't sound quite natural, it's really good. I just prefer writing that doesn't have words like "sh**" in it.Alyiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07400675770075464950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-82323979999324021692011-06-23T17:01:42.210-04:002011-06-23T17:01:42.210-04:00I just resent it! It's fine lolI just resent it! It's fine lolPaige Woinerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07204238243107594354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-78871212648020190522011-06-23T16:20:25.451-04:002011-06-23T16:20:25.451-04:00Okay, LOL... this is going to sound really really ...Okay, LOL... this is going to sound really really stupid. But I think I just accidentally deleted the email you sent me - it got sent to my spam, and I noticed it just while I was emptying my spam box. SORRY! I didn't mean to make more work for you! :P Do you think you could resend it? I really will try not to delete it this time. ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-58850813157285709912011-06-23T13:50:41.005-04:002011-06-23T13:50:41.005-04:00My email is taylor.cope96@yahoo.com... I'd lov...My email is taylor.cope96@yahoo.com... I'd love to read the whole thing, if you could send it to me. :) Though I won't be able to open it on my computer unless it's a PDF file or a Microsoft Office Word 2003 file... what do you use to type your work up?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-18695415861493543372011-06-22T19:34:41.858-04:002011-06-22T19:34:41.858-04:00I think the book is awesome :) I LOOVEE the cover ...I think the book is awesome :) I LOOVEE the cover page :)Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589055021610942406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-81080653904625507472011-06-22T18:20:25.399-04:002011-06-22T18:20:25.399-04:00@Taylor, I think chapter two was one of them.. cou...@Taylor, I think chapter two was one of them.. could i email you that? What's your email?Paige Woinerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07204238243107594354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-45551312983407977572011-06-22T18:11:36.418-04:002011-06-22T18:11:36.418-04:00Are there any specific chapters that people critiq...Are there any specific chapters that people critiqued? Because I could probably check out a specific chapter for you... but I don't think I have enough time to spend on the computer to read it all. If you emailed it to me, though, I could probably print it out and read it, give you my opinion...?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-8647110047258302012011-06-22T14:54:19.369-04:002011-06-22T14:54:19.369-04:00Reply to your comment: I'd be happy to help! E...Reply to your comment: I'd be happy to help! Email away! xDSavannah Jeanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02659062736697798048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-37186430636185984762011-06-22T14:32:06.930-04:002011-06-22T14:32:06.930-04:00I would check out your dialogue but I can't vi...I would check out your dialogue but I can't view anything on inkpop. You can always email it to me. xD (PS: Did you say your story has 17k words? Cause I would take that to edit if you want!) <br /><br />Anyway, mechanical dialogue is just...it doesn't sound natural. Often times, if you say it outloud and it sounds weird and not something you would say in real life, then it's mechanical and unreal.Savannah Jeanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02659062736697798048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3647188858325056022.post-50327280024183918522011-06-22T14:13:04.162-04:002011-06-22T14:13:04.162-04:00I checked out the dialogue and nothing seems unnat...I checked out the dialogue and nothing seems unnatural to me. In fact, I think the dialogue is perfect. The Dialogue you wrote is modern day stuff. I see how it might be considered different, but I like the way it is! I'm probably not the type of person to notice unnatural things or edit a book, but I honestly see nothing wrong with your dialogue.Conversehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04971018504778767949noreply@blogger.com